Today for our poetry assignment we had to go through the newspaper and find an article to write a poem about. We had to write like we witnessed the account. I read a tragedy that recently happened in Edmonton Alberta. A terrible explosion in a neighbourhood. There wasn’t a lot written in the article but there were a lot of pictures. It’s was a very traumatic story.
Blackened Tears
Billowing black clouds
mushroomed high,
colouring blue skies, with fear
Scattered debris, like matchsticks
discarded, flames snuffed and smouldering
The explosion echoed
rattling my windows
A monster knocking, no where to hide
Its eyes like flames,
glowing behind torn curtains
Tangled pieces of metal, embedded
in rooftops and vehicles
Dandelions and green grass,
once blanketed with lazy bodies on hot summer days,
now a graveyard to the shrapnel of shattered lives
Sunday’s sprinklers
replaced with fire hoses,
spraying high to unforgiving
flames, choking cries
from the shocked and traumatized
Darkness falls; 1:20 Sunday afternoon,
sirens fill the streets
A warzone
Through smoky scenes,
masked saviours search
A nightmare, dreamt with
eyes open
An explosion, unknown
Three men’s lives, stolen
on a Day for Fathers
Very good stuff. Especially turning it round at such short notice.
You consider altering the generic “debris” embedded in rooftops, to a particular item of debris. Might be more poignant. Sorry, I have not gone to the trouble of suggesting one.
Comment by blackwatertown — June 21, 2010 @ 9:18 pm
Thank you, blackwatertown. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and make a suggestion to improve my writing.
Comment by writetoday — June 21, 2010 @ 9:42 pm
So Sad…..Excellent Write Up
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Comment by Creativity — June 23, 2010 @ 2:56 pm