Today’s post is actually an assignment for my poetry class and a submission for Thursday Tales. This is my first time submitting any writing at Thursday Tales although I have stopped by and read a lot and have really enjoy the site. My assignment was to look at a picture and write ten lines. The first line – ask a question by the character. Next four lines- introduce a conflict the character has. Next four lines – resolve the conflict. Final line – rephrase the initial conflict in the first line, which is called an envelope effect”.
Grandma
Can you hear my words, lost in an echo?
Whispering swing, gently hushed
wisps of hair falling, unnoticed
I wait for your arms
to comfort me
My eyes find you, there!
Your smell; cinnamon and blackberries
lifting me high, my fingers
touch your skin, softly
Can you hear my words, lost in your heart?
image courtesy: andrewf1
hi Melody, firstly.. welcome to Thursday Tales. hope we see you submitting more often!
secondly, your poem is very good. its sort of a story in a poem isn’t it? when we started Thursday Tales, we thought we’d make it fully stories, but a story in a poem is also fine now! glad you dropped by!
keep writing
see you this Thursday too…
Comment by Leo — June 22, 2010 @ 4:03 am
Hello Melody,:) Excellent Beautiful Write Up A Story In A Poetry Form.:D Very Well Written
. Keep Writing For Thursday Tales. 
You Have Excellent Writing Skills. 
Would Wish To See You Every Thursday. 
Wishing You All The Very Best Success,:)
Creativity.
Comment by Creativity — June 23, 2010 @ 11:43 am
Thank you Leo and Creativity for your inspiring and thoughtful comments. I had fun with Thursday Tales and will be back for more! I will try for more stories but am working with poetry at the moment.
Comment by Anonymous — June 23, 2010 @ 2:11 pm